A Beast who loved You.

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    Arhaz

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    A Beast who loved You.


    I’m mistaken to be your dread, so cold,
    My life has been a nightmare, I should have told.
    Don’t run away yet, feel me breathe,
    Imagine, for it feels real to me.
    I’m hollow, but I wish not to be,
    I’m filled with Love for you to see.
    Can you hold the desperation in my eyes?
    Yet, I wonder...who am I joking with all these lies?
    It’s true that I’m the creature you fear,
    I’m a web of hate and truths so clear?
    Why are you afraid when you shall rest in peace?
    What is greater than living forever- with me?
    Close your eyes when you want to love me back,
    Picture me as a prince, when the world’s in black.
    I am the prince of dreams, so why not here?
    I am faithfully, you nightmarish prince, my dear.
    Yes, indeed, I was that very prince, the One,
    Who reached his love till her every command was done.
    But humbled am I now, after all that respect and pride,
    When I see you hiding there, I hear your silent cries.
    The people about, heartless, feared me, but I cared no less,
    I’m hurt, as I see you use your tears to soak your dress.
    My love, I lived these long years for you,
    To see you pleased, not those ugly beads of dew.
    Wipe them off now as my anger rises,
    I feel so much hate, a mental crisis.
    Say you love me, I fear an outburst,
    Trust me; my love for you is what I hold first.
    I’d only wish you would waste away loving me, instead of crying,
    I couldn’t contain it longer, and now you’re dying.
    Forgive me, my love and Love itself,
    I cried within my soul, for years with no care, no help.
    These fangs have grown out of years of exile,
    I loved my princess, for her I conquered every mile.
    And as the Evil Forces had promised, they’ve done their deed,
    As I murdered my love, beside her, at last, I bleed.

    :mellow:
    :'(


    it's very long, but i hope you guys like it! :mellow: :unsure:
     
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    Adam

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    I enjoyed reading that. It was very poetic. :)
     
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    Arhaz

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    Thanks a lot Adam ^_^ ...never seen you around The Writer's Cove...any works of yours?
     
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    wow, this was really good!

    i love these lines!

    did make me alittle weepy though... :'(
     
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    Thanks a lot fallenangel! ^_^
     
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    Messy Marj

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    Man that makes me even more sad then I already am. But it is good. You did a wonderful job on this one. <3
     
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    Excellent.
     
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    wow, just brilliant, you are an amazing writer. I really felt sorry for the person in the poem. Just a great job at getting the reader to feel how you want them to, that is an amazing tallent, never stop writing.
     
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    Arhaz

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    thanks a lot people... ^_^



    marj...why are you sad? :mellow: take care girl...i'll mail ya ^_^
     

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