Fallen Soul

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    a life in ashes

    a life in ashes mercury summer

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    Fallen Soul

    So much like a lie,
    You're just a little whore,
    Blue lips, Stone chips,
    Left lying in the dirt,
    Now do you believe,

    I'm vampire killed with a stake,
    You won't see my cold sweat tonight,
    A terrible lie made somewhat worse,

    Make my heart turn to ribbons,
    My flesh crumbles cold from your voice,

    Fallen Soul,
    Fallen Soul,
    Fallen Soul,
    Fallen Soul,

    So my veins are dry,
    The veil has fallen,
    Wrist slit, That's it,
    I've given up to the ghosts,
    Now we see the gates,

    And what do you care for,
    Nothing your stinging tongue can stop now,
    Spit the bitter, Spread the sour snowfall,

    Learn from the years gone by,
    Empty is my resolve to stop the grind,

    Fallen Soul,
    Fallen Soul,
    Fallen Soul,
    Fallen Soul,

    Fallen Soul,
    Fallen Soul,
    Fallen into the great below.
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

    lp_sk8ergurl Well-Known Member

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    :lol: I find that funny, anyways good job.
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    I quite liked it. It was very visual, you did a great job with imagery.

    The setup of it is unusual but it seemed to work quite well. The flow was fairly good and although i couldn't really find it the first time i read it, i found it the second time.

    Overall fairly good, keep it up.
     

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