Making a Pointless Wish Insects march like dust in time, Blood runs from the wrist of another loss, My name gets called by sin itself, As we all fade away, I've become so numb, This lie is just a little raw, My bite's worse than your bark, So long, goodbye, and die, You're making a pointless wish, You're making a pointless wish, You're making a pointless wish, As the mirror suddenly breaks, Love isn't enough, We have to make it hurt some more, I'm getting smaller in my shell, The scab is starting to sting, You're making a pointless wish, You're making a pointless wish, You're making a pointless wish, As the mirror suddenly breaks, Remember all your lies, Remember the open wounds, Remember all your lies, Remember the open wounds, Remember all your lies, Remember the open wounds, Remember all your lies, Remember the open wounds, You're making a pointless wish, As the mirror suddenly breaks, You're making a pointless wish, As the mirror suddenly breaks, You're making a pointless wish, As the mirror suddenly breaks, You're making a pointless wish, As the mirror suddenly breaks. Thoughts please...
I found it quite good, but i dissliked the repetativeness of it. The three verses which didn't repeat the same line over and over again were just completely amazing. But the others lacked the life found in these few amazing verses. You created 3 beautiful verses full of meaning, and then it felt like to make it longer you slapped together some extra verses, couldn't think of any lines and didn't know what to write so repeated the same line. I know this isn't how it most likely happened but i'm just trying to express how i feel about the poem.