this is my first song i wrote and i am proud of it up to speed your to slow, you cant keep up with da flow, speed up, at least change the gear. speed up, slow down, change gear, but don't reverse. london, leeds up to speed, liverpool, bristol changing gears manchester, birmingham up tp speed, newcastle, bournemouth changing gears. everybody's going to fast, your going to slow, you gotta pick up da pace, if you wanna win the race. 6,5,4,3,2,1, but not reverse, you gotta keep moving, never stop, or go back. luton, chesea up to speed, tottenham, cardiff changing gears, west london, east london up to speed. england, scotland, wales, rep. of ireland, UP TO SPEED. UNITED KINGDOM, UP TO SPEED. you gotta keep moving, dont stop living, dont look back, look at the future and thats a fact. what do u think?
Pretty good for a first song, you seem to have some talent and i believe you will only get better the more you write, so keep writing.