a demo write up-more added

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by saunderitos, Jul 13, 2005.

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    saunderitos

    saunderitos Banned

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    ive put the demo up,ive added some more,i want to have some pointers before i try and finish it :D


    Civilization
    A mind ablation*
    Disintegrate
    Those who cant wait-
    For you to fall
    Lie on the ground and call-
    for help from the normal kids
    mongoloids and flids

    Ashes to Ashes
    Dust to Dust

    Society
    You have no right to me!
    I won’t give you what you desire
    Because of that, my minds on fire
    There’s nothing wrong with me
    I’m fine
    I absorb all colours
    But won’t shine

    Ashes to Ashes
    Dust to Dust


    *An ablation is the surgical removal of an organ or part |:)
     
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    Luke

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    This kinda reminds me of a blend between Trivium-Declaration and Metallica-The Memory Remains :lol:

    Good work though :)
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    I must say i liked this better than your last, but this one is much simpler. Is this going to be a song? cause if it is, it seems a bit short. But yer, pretty good, keep it up.
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Keep up the good writing.
     
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    saunderitos

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    yes it will be a song,i though i'd put up a demo and see what people think of it

    thanks for the comments guys :)
     

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