Seasons

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    Theazninvasion68

    Theazninvasion68 It's like blood to a vampire, our tragic desire. LPA Super VIP

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    Spring melts, the sun glazeing and opening
    the hearts of many, where that specail
    girl down the street, goes outside and
    greets you, happily, as if she had
    a great warm crush.
    She walks up, and asks for a date
    standing in the great warm sensation
    you agree.
    As you smile, she comes up and gives
    you a little kiss.
    The sun, beating on her skin
    The loveing warmth that has sprung at you
    a twist of luck and faith
    has heated the friendship.

    Summer heats up, the sun shining
    the plants grow ever so beautiful
    and her face, evolving, changing.
    You grow attached and love her
    she feels the warmth, the person loveing
    her so much.
    You send her flowers, seasonal flowers
    she undyingly loves you more
    feeling abit down, you try
    to please her, with your warmth
    she is content, her heart, warm with joy.
    She goes on a vacation, and with a
    picture of you, that she wont forget.

    Fall breeze, a array of colors
    a celebration to feast
    an arrival expected, you wait
    patiently.
    As you feast the celebration
    as you wait for her arrival
    you look around anxciously
    for her appearance
    you try to have a good feast.
    But there is a cut silence.
    the fall breeze blows though the opening,
    and two torn papers
    come across to your sight
    it is your picture.
    You look around and though the colors of
    Fall, you spot her, with another person.
    she walks up to you
    crying, she gives you one last kiss
    and a note
    as you start to open it,
    the feast continues, and you start
    to have tears, reading it,
    you start to cry
    the winds blow and so does the warmth
    you had in your heart,
    turns cold. the night casts a cloud
    of rain and snow
    you being to think, and drift into memories.


    Winter winds blow thought the valley
    snow, is a blanket of frost
    comfort, at your house and bed
    happiness, in every ones heart
    she the special one so far distant
    as long as you keep touch
    as long as you talk
    rerember the times
    that you and her had a "moments"
    save it
    and savor the moments
    as presious time
    as it only happens once
    that the first kiss
    is the best
    and the last kiss
    sadding
    like the cold Winter winds
    blowing past your face
    saying good-bye

    :unsure: Comments anyone?

    EDIT: the first segment was winter,
    the rest i decided to add on.
     
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    linkinpark_ben25

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    nice array of words added, erm..... to make it better you could possibly add a few sentences in between the sentences, that would split up the seasons.

    nice work ;)
     
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    El Muerto

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    fall has always been my favourite season
    you did a great job with fall
    *applaudes*
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    You did well.
     
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    Luke

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    I really like this,a few typos but still good :)
     
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    Tom

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    weldone i like it , keep up the good work :thumbsup:
     
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    Lpimp

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    ;) Great job man!loved it!9.5/10
     
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    Brentaliath

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    Pretty good.
     

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