Just a little freestyle I did off the top, not towards anyone. I'm just feeling in a loving mood.. == This compassion soaked imagery, Clouding my mind, flowin into me, Beauty of my words cannot define, The way I feel for you in my mind, Searchin for you in the clouds above, Hopin you can bless me with that love, When you're beside me in my dreams, Nothin appears to be the way it seems. The way I feel for you in my mind, Thats the way I feel for you all the time, Some poetics say that love is blind, But did they feel this feeling of sublime? I could reword it a thousand ways, And claim this love for days and days, But I'll leave you with whats been said, For this is love off the top of my head, Love and kisses baby...
You don't post much here derek but i must say you are very good, i really like it, i want to see more.
the only thing wrong with it that i find, is that a few words at the end of lines seemed to be thrown on for the sake of rhyme. But other than that its great.
Wow. Damn. I'm very impressed. I've read some of your other work and I must say that I'm shocked that I've loved everything that you've written. Usually I'll like one or two works from a writer and then the rest of their stuff is just "ok", but this is amazing. Your style seems unfaltering. Keep up the great work.
this was really beautiful! i like reading stuff that's not so depressing all the time! i thought this flowed really well. just lovely!