Don't want to be back.

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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    it can't be good...but i was really missing some writing...been sometime...and i'm back with something new that needs your comments! ^_^




    Don’t want to be back.


    When I’ll get away somewhere,
    Somehow, I’ll be gone,
    And you’ll be down right there,
    Screaming for me to come home.
    But now it’s the time that I release
    All this hypnotic pain,
    It’s time for your torture to cease,
    I’m not going insane.

    And I can’t help the suffocation,
    Killing my mind as slow,
    As the time of contemplation
    Has come, and I’m all ready to go.

    But soon you’ll pull me back,
    With all those smiles and lies,
    Soon I’ll be in your shack,
    The shack where all my peace dies.
    Please don’t humble my escape,
    I need some time to me,
    Don’t give me those eyes of horrid gape,
    In a moment I’ll be going to me.




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    fallenangel

    fallenangel Well-Known Member

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    pretty good, not your best but still pretty darn good!

    i actually really really like this bit!

    can't wait to read more from you soon, your work has gotten so good lately! :thumbsup:
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    thanks so much, fallenangel! ^_^
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Very good work.
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    ^_^ thanks lpsk8er!
     

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