Haloed Tears

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    arT saveS

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    Inspiration from my first.

    Under the wings of your savior, you will burn and smolder.
    Protection from this destruction lies within the truth.
    Running through the hollow, we find the depressed.
    No escaping the void where we come to rest.
    Part from the world as you walk upon your death.
    All will end so the angel said.

    So the tears from the sky fall with grace and elegance,
    Washing away the filth and soil that we are.
    And the red water spills from the wound of a knight,
    Draining the life out of the nothing that we are.
    This desolate voyage, we sink then swim…
    Lost in disastrous waters and giving in.
    Catastrophic ruins built by sin…
    Controlled by evil death loving fetishes.

    He told me to pray, and to hope.
    He told me to love and as he spoke,
    I saw a glimmer of optimism.
    He told me he knew the truth,
    And as I found the glimmer was merely a tear,
    The angel said, “All will end, and we will be left with nothing.”
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    Emotional stuff. I think this is one of my favourites of all time. It is so good. i mean damn, the day i can write that good is the day i'll be able to diss your work in some way. Just totally amazing
    This bit is the best. Just amazing.....*speachless*
     
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    Amazing work.
     
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    arT saveS

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    David: Thank you very much. That last part is one of my favorite things I've ever written...

    lpsk8er: Thank you a lot also, I'm glad you both think it's amazing. :)
     
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    a life in ashes

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    awesome work, i wish i could write like you....
    keep on writing...
     
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    This desolate voyage, we sink then swim…
    Lost in disastrous waters and giving in.
    Catastrophic ruins built by sin…
    Controlled by evil death loving fetishes.

    He told me to pray, and to hope.
    He told me to love and as he spoke,
    I saw a glimmer of optimism.
    He told me he knew the truth,
    And as I found the glimmer was merely a tear,
    The angel said, “All will end, and we will be left with nothing.”



    I love this part...is amazing
     
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    fallenangel

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    i have to agree with the others on this one cause this last part has amazing rhythm to it and flows so smoothly.

    i think the writers block has offically lifted! :lol:
     
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    arT saveS

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    Thank you both. :)

    fallenangel: I hope so. It's not fun to write when what I write sucks.
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    LOL, i hear you brother.
     
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    Arhaz

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    it's a fantastic piece!! keep it up! great work! (w00t)
     
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    Thank you very much. :D
     
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    Darcy

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    Wow, I love this poem. And I agree with the others, that last part is my favorite. You are awesome, keep it up!
     

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