how will i do it today

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    fallenangel

    fallenangel Well-Known Member

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    how will i do it today
    show them the visual representation of my pain
    by taking a little white pill so white and pure
    that in enough quantity can be deadly and sour
    how about the knife that is so big and so clumsy
    but the blood, oh yes, now that would show them

    how about a razor blade that is so small and sharp
    that used right can be easy to twist into my flesh
    blood can flow freely showing them the pain in all it's glory
    the wonder and splender of the torture flowing out of me
    flowing fast and running clear on the ground
    now that will show them the pain when i am found


    now i know this may very well crash and burn but i am trying still to get through my writers block... :(
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    Does everyone around here have writers block? :lol:

    Great work. Not one of your best but better than the shit i was churning out when i had writers block. It is different and i like the idea and i still think it came out pretty well. also,
    this sentance doesn't make much sence, u need to reword it a bit, or mabye you accidently left a word out. ;)
    Anyway, great work, keep it up.
     
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    fallenangel

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    thanks alot for the comment david.

    yes, that sentence was different orginaly and i changed it last minute so maybe i should have left it as it was! :lol:
     
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    Glue

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    Wow! Great job. I like this part"show them the visual representation of my pain by taking a little white pill so white and pure".
     
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    fallenangel

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    thanks very much Gluez! glad you liked it!

    yes, i like that line too. i was one of the first parts i wrote! thanks again! :lol:
     

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