Love's true face I’d like a world full of sadness A world without joy Cuz inside this evil blindness I’m nothing but his toy He makes me want to drown Inside what gives him bliss With such a heavy crown He gets me on my knees Everything has been told He’s deep inside of me And I’ll forever hold What keeps me from being free…
Well if you ask me this definetly cant be one of your best,honestly I have seen so much of your talent,I mean by all means this doesnt seem to be in the league of what I have read of yours,but then this is like the movie The Matrix,it had set such a high bar for itself with everything in the movie that forget other movies wich tried to ape it,even the two sequels couldnt match to the first movie(though the sequels by any standard were great),but still it couldnt match to the bar set by the first movie,this is something like it,you have set a bar for yourself with your other poems that even if this poem is like others its bound that I feel its not as good as others,Ok this is getting too long now :chemist: ,but definetly I expect much more from you and am damn sure that you will give your best,keep writing. P.S:Sorry if I was rude with my comments and then I maybe wrong too but this what I felt.
I like it. It's short, and direct. I do think that your other works are better, but this is amazing in its own way...keep it up!
Though this poem is not my favourite of yours i don't think anyone has the right to say it is not your best because saying that it isn't someones best if fact while really it is only your oppinion. I like the directness of this poem. Short and sweet. Even though it isn't my favourite i think you pulled off a great poem which is written a bit differently to some of your previous ones. It is the great poet who explores all the different aspects of poetry to get a better understanding of it and how they can make poetry work for them. Again, amazing job. Great work. Keep it up
wow, thanks to all, but specially you david, you really moved me. ok, when i say things such as "I’m nothing but his toy", "He gets me on my knees" and stuff like that, I'm reffering to love itself (this goes to everyone who had the kindness of reading this). I wanted to say that love's a real bastard, although i don't feel like that always. i know this kind of sucks and it's really short, but even if it's not a really good one, I believe i said what needed to be said. Otherwise, you'd be eaten by boredom just by reading the first lines. That's just my opinion. Thank you so much for your comments guys, I really appreciate it.