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    arT saveS

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    Just slipping away from this crevice, this hole that is always decaying
    Beauty haunts us but never stays, pray for peace, but sleep to see another day
    Will the soul, press but don’t fold, down we go…
    Into to the hole, to bury ourselves underneath, burrowing our trench
    And inside this black hole, lies a cold heart of stone
    Stemming from the seed of this unknown invisible tree
    Along the path of treachery we walk, and betrayal walks with us…
    Holding hands as I kiss the cheek of god, backstab him…
    Strong like the black widow that spawns her beauty…
    Web of hunger that destroys and eats the weak.
    Again, down we go into our safe hole…
    Our little fucking hole, defender of the weak.
    Down we go…
     
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    gozorninplat

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    I like that last part "defender of the weak". As a whole, it's directionless, yet centered. I like it a lot.

    EDIT: grammatical error
     
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    arT saveS

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    Thank you. :)
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    Nice work........again......... ;)

    It's short but i like it, it doesn't seem to go anywhere but it explains alot. It is weird. Good stuff.
     
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    fallenangel

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    pretty good! ;)
     
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    a life in ashes

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    sounds like nine inch nails....

    great work
     
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    hybrid_fan

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    good
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    It's one of the best short poems I've read.
     
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    arT saveS

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    Thank you. :)
     

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