Answer your Toy

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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    Answer your toy.


    I feel nothing right now,
    Just a pinch of pain,
    And now you see it rising,
    I can feel it reach my brain.
    I feel this reckless hatred,
    Felt so often before,
    I’ve held this feeling sacred,
    Ever since you walked out the door.

    CHORUS
    Answer me, you lied to me,
    I knew it from the start,
    I was to be your petty play,
    Until I was torn apart.
    You nurtured the falsehood,
    You let the pain find its place,
    And here I am, where you stood,
    Questions slapping your face.

    I feel caught in a clumsy choke
    Of all the crimes committed,
    I’m vulnerable to this wayward hoax,
    Till I feel submitted.
    I’m holding anger my closest friend,
    Now that I’m betrayed,
    I’ll hold on to it till the day you end,
    And I’m left an angry stray.

    CHORUS
    Answer me, you lied to me,
    I knew it from the start,
    I was to be your petty play,
    Until I was torn apart.
    You nurtured the falsehood,
    You let the pain find its place,
    And here I am, where you stood,
    Questions slapping your face.

    C’mon, tell me why you’ve returned?
    Why did you even leave?
    Am I a toy meant to be spurned?
    Dying to your relief?
    Why do these questions confuse you now?
    Why can’t you answer me straight?
    Look at me in the eye; answer
    Whom do you really hate?



    i need some suggestions please!!! atleast this time... :wth: :unsure:
    ^_^
     
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    Muri

    Muri It never ends.

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    Woooow. I love this. ^_^ Keep on going!! :D
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    really? thankie!! ^_^
     
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    fallenangel

    fallenangel Well-Known Member

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    this is actually quite good! i like the way you have compared yourself to a toy, little more original i think...

    i don't think you need to chage any of it cause it's good as it stands!

    good job. ;)
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    thanks so much...it was very random though... ^_^



    PS-Writer's Cove is growing rapidly...KEEP IT UP!!! (w00t)
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    Yer, very nice. And i do agree, original.

    The chorus is my favourite part but the whole thing is awsome. Keep it up.

    PS and yay that Writer's cove is growing...when i came here only like 5 people ever did anything but now we are gettin more and more writers. ^_^
     
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    sickcycle

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    very nice, flowed great! I got a Killers/Linkin Park vibe from it B)
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    thanks guys!! (w00t) ...i'd really also like to know if something is wrong...and negative points??
     
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    fallenangel

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    i'm afraid i can't help you on that one, cause i think it's pretty good!
     

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