the walking wounded

ok, this is the full version and i would be really pleased if this was reviewed cause this is the first poem i have actually put more effort into. here goes...

the walking wounded

in this present i am driven by the anger
that was given to me long ago by my abusers
i want to show them all the cuts that bore down so deeply
all the pain that is still there that they all gave me
was there just something in me that was so repulsive
or just something that their black little hearts couldn't stand so they tried to ruin it
all i wanted was to be left alone, to be ignored
but they couldn't do that cause i seemed an easy target

over the years i have become a stranger
to myself becoming ever madder
cause i am the walking wounded
and their gift to me was anger

because of the ways in which they treated me
the anger is a raging fire that burns deep within
and every time that i face one of my abusers the fire gets fiercer
making me want to have them feel the hurt which is no lesser
if only i could take them with me deep into my past
they would feel what i felt and i bet they wouldn't last
they wouldn't know what hit them and they would never survive
the pain that was inflicted by them, i bet they would fall down and die

gathering up the strengh, trying to forget
but the memories won't let me
my anger is now on a path that is set
cause i am the walking wounded

 

Oh my... I really really really really like it,heck,I really really really love it.
Very good job!

 

thank you very much! glad you liked it!

 

I'm glad you added to what you had, as I liked what you had. I see you also changed the first stanza a bit also. I think it's probably my favorite from you, it turned out very good.

 

thanks again. this one, as i said, i worked at more than any of my other ones. they were all ones that were completed in about 10-15 mins. this one took much longer than that!

 

It's really good. It's bleeding fabulous! I haven't been posting much, or replying either, sorry bout that...I really like this one, write more!! lol

 

thank you torn rose!

i may write more soon so keep a look out. but thanks again all for the comments!

 

impressive. really. and thanks for the nice comment on my "insane is life" poem. i look forward to seeing more from you.

 

thanks very much army_skater101!

i like to try and read and post in most poems. if it's good, i'll say so!