Fear

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    arT saveS

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    Dark secrets shadowing burden…
    Burning holes that enflame my hate…
    Will you share my pain, please…
    I’m afraid this is the end my dear
    I’ve been troubled too much to hold on…
    Guilty of nothing but affection and optimism
    Decaying heart bleeds away…
    Weakness overcomes sanity…
    It is everything, and I bow to it…
    I worship it
    For no emotion has such impact…
    No feeling can cause this…
    So strong it inspires me
    And it speaks to me, calling my name
    It beckons me to follow
    Pleading that I will give up
    No defense against this monster
    All of it ends,
    No escaping fear.


    New title: Rising of Trepidation

    woo hoo spicy enough? :p
     
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    fallenangel

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    another good one! fab! ;)
     
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    sickcycle

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    Tis good, but the title is a little bland, might I make a suggestion, go with something a little more spicy, maybe, "Fear That Beckons" "Enchanting Fear" [both suck, but you know what I mean]
     
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    arT saveS

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    Yeah, I agree, I need to change the title. I will think up something.
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    You should just change the title but everything else is good.
     
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    arT saveS

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    Thanks all. I changed the title, dunno if I like it. Bigger words.
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    WOW, man, you are too good to describe in words. another great piece.

    PS title is better.
     
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    Il inno di morte

    Il inno di morte A noi si schiude il ciel...

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    I really like your stuff, it's awesome!!! (w00t) . I've noticed you kind of prefer short poems, which is fantastic, cuz I really admire the fact that you say so much with just a few words.. way to go!!!
     
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    arT saveS

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    Thanks all.

    @Sparkling Diamond: I've written longer stuff, I actually prefer my longer stuff, more time to go into detail. Kinda like a poem I will be posting later named "The Casket in the South". It's a lot longer, more dark than deep. But usually I post stuff right after I've written it, and I need to stop posting so many at a time. Anyways, thank you. :)
     

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