pure water

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    fallenangel

    fallenangel Well-Known Member

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    the water that seems so clear
    perfectly as it flows
    unconaminated sitting there
    in the pond as it glows

    like the love that is felt
    from the ones that love you
    unconditionaly it all seems
    loving you all the way through

    but looking ever more closely
    seeing the inpurities flooting about
    contaminating the beauty
    the waters purity is in doubt

    it's just like them, you know
    the ones who tell you they love you
    but it's all lies cause
    they always want something from you


    thoughts please... ;)
     
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    arT saveS

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    The only problem is that you spelt "floating" as " flooting"! :lol:

    It's very good, nice job. :)
     
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    fallenangel

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    he he! there goes my spelling again! :D

    thanks! ^_^
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Good stuff.
     
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    fallenangel

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    thanks very much.
     

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