New version. Sadness in dark eyes Shadowing fear in my hollow heart This betrayal I am… So lost beside myself Amen, god comes to my side To terminate my hopes Shallow, deceitful… Are you happy on your throne? Tempest raging Contagious wrath in this continuous… Sphere of darkness; bleak, death, empty Casting gloom onto optimism Circle of light that brings… All of our beliefs into spectrum Lost in the rainstorm Pouring inside my head Concentration of thought… Lost like me Alone, looking for you… Or maybe just seeking truth Promise me that someday I’ll find… Security in hope and praying This infidelity surrounding me Bleeding eyes screaming visions of… Loss, lies, why do you mislead… Piercing my ears with deception Smothering me with your word… That I would love to kill I crave sanctuary against you Ironic words to feed my anger I reflect as I reveal your downfall Your demise, your destruction, your death… Would make everything alright No more religion, no more beliefs… Means no more reason to kill Even those who wish the slaughtering to stop… Must kill to bring murder to an end… Mortality is the endless existence of ignorance Bringing pity onto your miscarriage of a creation Dreaming of existing… Waking to the knowledge… That it is all just a delusion… Watching victims of creed Sedate themselves with values Principles, standards, ethics… The walls that hold everyone back from… Endless understanding of everything… Wake up
Another awsome poem, keep it up, can't wait to see what you add. I'm sure it will be just as good as the start. Great work, can't wait to see more, damn, i am just speachless, absolurely great stuff.
Your very talented, cant say I like the subject matter, but still a very well writtin and worded poem.
New version. Sadness in dark eyes Shadowing fear in my hollow heart This betrayal I am… So lost beside myself Amen, god comes to my side To terminate my hopes Shallow, deceitful… Are you happy on your throne? Tempest raging Contagious wrath in this continuous… Sphere of darkness; bleak, death, empty Casting gloom onto optimism Circle of light that brings… All of our beliefs into spectrum Lost in the rainstorm Pouring inside my head Concentration of thought… Lost like me Alone, looking for you… Or maybe just seeking truth Promise me that someday I’ll find… Security in hope and praying This infidelity surrounding me Bleeding eyes screaming visions of… Loss, lies, why do you mislead… Piercing my ears with deception Smothering me with your word… That I would love to kill I crave sanctuary against you Ironic words to feed my anger I reflect as I reveal your downfall Your demise, your destruction, your death… Would make everything alright No more religion, no more beliefs… Means no more reason to kill Even those who wish the slaughtering to stop… Must kill to bring murder to an end… Mortality is the endless existence of ignorance Bringing pity onto your miscarriage of a creation Dreaming of existing… Waking to the knowledge… That it is all just a delusion… Watching victims of creed Sedate themselves with values Principles, standards, ethics… The walls that hold everyone back from… Endless understanding of everything… Wake up @Fallen Angel: Thank you, ha I don't know...I just write what pops into my head.
NIce. you have great tallent. I have nothing else to say. Great work. Keep it up. Just totally awsome.
So I'm taking it as this one gets your "wow" factor? I have reached my goal. Thank you. [/b][/quote] LOL It sure does. Great work