Between The Lines

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    El Muerto

    El Muerto LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    Between The Lines

    I cannot seem to read between the lines
    To see what is within
    I’ve always felt so lost and out of time
    Deprived of everything
    The world around has always looked at me
    Through eyes full of disgrace
    I should’ve known better than letting it
    All inside of me

    Take the pieces of my broken trust
    And put them back again
    I don’t need no pity and remorse
    I just need a friend
    There is no sun shining in my life
    Everything is black
    When something is now already done
    You can’t take it back

    I really need to find the answers to
    The questions that infest
    My soul and mind I feel it’s tempting me
    Like some kind of test
    I know the sorrow and I know the pain
    But nothing can compare
    To the emptiness inside of me
    That’s eating me again
     
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    fallenangel

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    oh i really liked this! it flowed really well and the rhyming was not forced at all! great job :lol:
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Well done.
     
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    Awesome*Kryptonite

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    hey,

    I enjoyed your writing, Awesome job!

    From Awesome*Kryptonite! :cloud:
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    Nice work, rhyming not forced, nice flow and a powerful message, good stuff. i liked this much better than crossroads. but this is just my opinion. Great message, i love this poem, awsome work. keep writing.
     

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