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    arT saveS

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    Disguised, lost and lonely in subliminal thought…
    Surrounded, alone in life, clouded and cloaked…
    Enclosed in this dark mist, hidden within shadows…
    Bounded and veiled, parading imperfections…
    Brainwashed puppets that control us…
    Throw them into the abyss and impede our destruction…

    United with hate, in a State of Aggression…
    Global disgust, in a condition of pandemonium
    Give way to control; give way to ‘freedom’
    Give way to giving in; give way to lying down
    Shaping our mistakes, constituting murder

    Blanketed by the lies that protect us…
    Too blind to know that we are the lies…
    Experimental product…
    Manufactured for consumption
    We are alone in this…
    Shields for the president

    United with detestation, in a State of Anarchy…
    Global loathing, in a condition of mayhem
    Give way to power; give way to ‘choice’
    Give way to compliance; give way to force
    Forming our beliefs into what they need

    Declaring execution a legal form of venting stress…
    Denouncing any chance of living in harmony
    Too dumb and too ignorant to change our ways
    Keep on living as so does the bloodshed and the pain
    Living to die, to repent sins, bow to the blessed
    To be viewed and held by holiness…
    And be carried away…no more pain

    United with corruption, in a State of Annihilation…
    Global hatred, in a condition of havoc
    Give way to religion; give way to difference
    Give way to ruins; give way to damage
    Constructing cracks in our feeble institution


    Yes, I know, kind of short. But let's think quality not quanity. :p
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Not bad at all.
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    Another outstanding poem, i love your work and your style of writing but i have one thing to say.

    I think you need to move on to another topic because you just keep writting about the same thing and i would like to see you go into other areas of life, other than the corrution of our world. Not saying this in a bad way but i am starting to get a bit board of your writting constantly in the same topic. Sorry to have to moan like this to such a talented writter but i think you deserve to know the truth.

    This is still an amaing poem but yer.....

    Keep writting.
     
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    arT saveS

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    I've written about other topics, but it seems to me everytime I do I don't get any replies, figure no one likes that style, so I go back to what people seem to like. Songs like "Within Me", I thought it was really good, but it didn't get any replies so that made me think otherwise.

    I'd love to write about other topics, and I do. But since that is a topic I'm very into, I write a lot about it. But thank you for being truthful, and I appreciate it a lot. :)
     
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    fallenangel

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    i love your poems! you seem to be quite an opinionated person, which i like.

    about changing your topic, i think it's a good idea and since i haven't been posting that long i will try and read some of your older stuff.

    but, fab effort. i would love to be able to write as good as you! :D
     

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