Shut up I know what you're thinking when you look at me Like that Shut up I know what you're saying when you talk to me Like that Why do you not understand I offer you the chance to see I try as hard as I possibly can You take the opportunity to scream at me I try to make myself Your perfect ideal But you don't understand So I'm breaking the deal With the devil, I know That you don't really care Like with your soul, I know That it isn't really there You say that I'm running From the responsibilities I hate But I'm not running, I'm hiding Till it's finally too late I'm gonna hide till you're done looking I'm gonna cry till no more tears I'm gonna run till you're done searching I'm gonna scream till no more fears Deny me what I need When I know that I deserve it Give me freedom, time to breathe Maybe I'll finally understand it You watch me with eyes of steel Hear me with ears of stone Hold me with arms of iron That will never let me go I'm trapped inside a broken home Doors locked and windows barred My body flawless, beautiful My soul, withered and scarred I'm gonna hide till you're done looking I'm gonna cry till no more tears I'm gonna run till you're done searching I'm gonna scream till no more fears ~R&R~ I need a new title for this song, can someone help me? -looks hopeful-
Nice, reminds me of For You by Staind and LP's Numb For the song title, I don't know...right now I can't think of anything, sorry. But still, good stuff
mmm... i like this. i can feel your frustration. as for the title, don't know. think about the general feeling your expressing in the poem and take the title from there.
... *stares in awe while trying to think of a tune* It's my favorite yet, reminds me alot my pathetic excuse for a mother. My favorite: So.Fucking.True
Nice and i also think one of your best yet. I can feel the pain and frustration as if it was my own. Easy to relate to as well. Great work. It does feel a bit like run away, yet totaly different (don't ask me how this is possible). Shut up is an ok title, though i do not really feel it somes u your poem, as the shut up line is more focused on pure anger while the others seem to be focussed around a mix of anger, frustration and confusion. as for my own title. ummm "running from your pain"
Cool,I dunno what to comment since everybody has said what I wanted to,I could relate to the poem,and about the title Shut Up is good,but I have a poem title for one of my own poems which suits this poem,its 'Shut Up and Speak Up'.lol I dunno if u like it,but I felt the title suits it,anyways keep it up,this surely is your best till date,great.