is the world ending or is it all in my mind? everything i've known is decaying the truth is blurring (or am i just going blind?) will i regress and resort back to praying to a false holder of morals? (but do i really doubt her existance?) there are so many things i could do but, shit, i've learned resistance and all because of you i've felt my world shatter you took out my life and ripped out what i thought had mattered so as i lay here bleeding from your penetration i want to thank you for my reinvention is the world ending or is it all in my head? the ashes of the past are making my eyes bleed why can't i wake up (am i already dead?) or is there something i need? but i have everything (and nothing all the same) a bipolar heart dysfunction (oh what a shame) and all because of you i've felt my world shatter you took my life and ripped out what i thought had mattered so as i lay here bleeding from your penetration i want to thank you for my reinvention is the world ending or is just a new beginning?
hey, nice work, this really is brilliant, Where have you been?????? This is a really great piece of work. It flows extemely well and you can really feel the mesagge penetrate into you. Since you are rhyming alot i thought that it might be good (not saying you have to if you don't like it, it's just an option, to end the chorusy bit with "for this revolaton" instead of "for my reinvention". This is just i choice a came up with while reading. great stuff, keep writing.
These lines rock,the poem is awesome,its thought provoking and has great meaning in it,you seem to have great mastery over words,lol even after reading just one poem of yours I definetly can say this,anyways great write keep it up,hope to see more of ur work.