High School Dirtbag

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    a life in ashes

    a life in ashes mercury summer

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    Highschool Dirtbag

    I'm the one they kick around,
    I'm the one they throw to the ground,
    The laughing stock of all the pigs,
    The target of so many tricks,
    A broken stick on the field,
    The highschool dirtbag,

    I'm the one who you spit on,
    I'm the dog you walk on,
    Just because i'm different,
    Just because i'm myself,
    Because I don't conform,
    I get kicked right down,

    But the worst time is everyday,
    But I think it's my fault,
    Perhaps I should join the fun,
    Perhaps I should never fight back,
    Then they might not spite me,
    I'm a suicidal loner,

    This time i've reached my end,
    This time i've told them how I feel,
    Will they stop wounding me,
    Will they ever let me see,
    Of course it didn't happen,
    I'm the highschool dirtbag,

    Look how the tables have turned,
    Look at this gun in my hand,
    Scream as the bullets hit your chest,
    Scream as you fit in dead with the rest,
    I took the matter in my hands,
    Now i've told them all,

    Now you all know how I felt,
    Forgotten,
    Forsaken,
    Disturbed,
    Dead,
    Now you're all dead.


    thoughts please....
     
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    fallenangel

    fallenangel Well-Known Member

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    :eek: this is fab! very dramatic at the end but it's very good! well there's nothing else i can say! well done, great writing!
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    It's got some emotion and it's well written.
     
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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    Beautiful! Lol, I love the emotions in this, it's great! The end was ...surprising...but I really liked it. Please continue writing! :D
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    AMAZING, this has left me speachless...........
    So much raw emotion is shown through this and then just explodes in the second last verse, this is fantastic and there is not much more i can say.
     
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    a life in ashes

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    thanks for the feedback, don't worry bullies at my school i won't be doing this to you....
     
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    LP_Freak_2735

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    Amazing work!!

    It's great people write about bullies..oughta teach em! ;)

    <3
     

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