Broken Heart

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    a life in ashes

    a life in ashes mercury summer

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    Broken Heart

    You know me,
    You know me all too well,
    It cuts the air like a bullet,
    Whilst my wounds remain,
    Here’s a little reminder,

    Shattered,
    Scorned,
    My heart is broken,
    Wretched,
    Wounded,
    My heart is broken,

    My failing,
    My failing’s there to see,
    I lie down and scream,
    Because it’s my only release,
    Here’s another reminder,

    Shattered,
    Scorned,
    My heart is broken,
    Wretched,
    Wounded,
    My heart is broken,

    Shattered (wretched),
    Scorned (wounded),

    Shattered,
    Scorned,
    My heart is broken,
    Wretched,
    Wounded,
    My heart is broken,

    I’m ruined,
    I’m ruined just like you,
    Did you want to share the pain,
    It’s what you’ve been through,
    My last reminder,

    Shattered,
    Scorned,
    My heart is broken,
    Wretched,
    Wounded,
    My heart is broken.

    thoughts please...
     
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    Il inno di morte

    Il inno di morte A noi si schiude il ciel...

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    isn't it fascinating how hate and failure can become very dear friends of ours? i belive you give an idea of this on your poem. it is really deep and realistic. many people would feel identified, cuz even though we all get to feel pain, we don't really know what to do with it.
    great writing. simple but powerful. congrats! good job!
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    i love this part...a lot
     
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    fallenangel

    fallenangel Well-Known Member

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    i feel that this would actually make a really good song! keep it up, your good!
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    I like the chorus.
     

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