This is my second poem put up here, I don't consider it as good as the first and maybe could expand it to be longer but it's a shorter one with a central theme of only escaping something terrible in your life by sleeping. Weeping Willows Walking forward, steps gone astray. Clouds darken, cold and gray. Willows weep and wind sighs. Self-destruction through my eyes. Weary heads rest on soft pillows. Away from this world of weeping willows.
hey, nice work!!! i want you to know that both of them are really good. this was kind of speacial because not so many people are able to describe emotions, feelings, etc. as well in just a few lines. Congrats, you are such a talented writer!
if this was expanded abit, it would be on rocking poem! as it stand, thought, it's still very good. very good use of imagery!
not a fan of short poems but this poem ROCKS. It's a unique talent to be able to describe so much in so few words. TERRIFIC work. Keep it up!
i like the rhyme sequence a lot...and the idea is just lovely...you can make some big thing from this for sure!!! continue writing!!!