this is one i just pened! see you soon my friend i will be with you it won't be that long then it will all be through all this this sickness and lies sooner or later, all has to die i'll see you soon just way over there to that far place where's theres all sweet air up, up and away i go there's nothing left here to hold i'll be there soon so don't you worry no one will notice they won't even worry i'm coming now the time is soon we'll be together my friend and we'll fly over the moon my blood is now dripping all over the floor god no! someone's at the door i don't want to be saved please let me be i want to be with you my friend please let me be free ok give it to me sraight, how was that?
nice i like it. Very powerful stuff. a poem about suicide is especially powerful. and i believe that is what it happening. i LOVE the meanig behind the poem, and the last verse is the BEST. Great work
your doing alot better everytime u write these poems, rerember to use it on multi emotions, ur work will be very big
thank you all i think i may try and write more happier stuff, we'll see. but yes this poem is about suicide but i don't like saying it directly in the poem. glad u all liked it.