another short poem

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    fallenangel

    fallenangel Well-Known Member

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    you all used to laugh at me
    bully me, taunt me
    but what you gonna do now
    cause you can' touch me
    cause i'm better than that now

    the anger you produced pushed me far
    i'm glad cause it's made me who i am
    a much stronger person who can cope
    with life's bitches cause i have new hope


    another early poem that just came out! :mellow:
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    short but nice. Keep up the good work. i think there are a few errors in the writing of it so check that out. Good job.
     
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    ahamLP

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    cool,you seem a better short poem writer than a long one(lol this is just a comment),but the poem has more to say then it seems to say,its emotional and I could relate to a few lines to my own life.thanx
     
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    fallenangel

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    :rolleyes: thanks. cause i am just starting out short poems are easier to get an emotion out but i think, in time, i will be able to write longer stuff. practice makes perfect, eh?
     
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    MeLiS_

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    it's really emotionaL, i like it.. :D
    keep writing poems..
     
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    Il inno di morte

    Il inno di morte A noi si schiude il ciel...

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    yeah, i agree. it's short, but it has a meaning and you make your point. You are starting to show emotions better :D . that's great, keep it up!
     
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    fallenangel

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    thanks all :p
    i think i'm getting the hang of this!
     

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