Im new and would really apreciate some feedback The devil thats inside The battle that wages inside my head, Is fought but never won. For the evil forces never run out Yet good has only one I feel my emotions escape from me And enter all those around. What I thought was good for me Has bought me to the ground. The pain inside is eating at me Trying to get free, The devil inside everyone, The dark side living me I try to run away, I try to run and hide, But how can you escape, Something that’s inside. How can you stop the darkness? When it lies within But you can not accept it You can not ever give in I feel my self give way to madness I scream but no one hears. Because I don’t own my body, The devil lives in here All I want is to be free, From the mad world I come from I feel myself step off the edge And slowly I do plunge. I may have stopped the devil, Living inside of me, But someone else out there Has let their devil free.
Hey, this is a great poem! i loved the part: I try to run away, I try to run and hide, But how can you escape, Something that's inside. Its really deep man, dont give up! keep on writing!
Honestly, I searched your stuff, cuz so far I liked all of it. Please dont get me wrong, I mean, I like your poems!!!!
lol I'll read it if you give me the opportunity . If u want me to, please post it or sent it to me. I'll be glad to give you my opinion if u want to hear it
whats that? lol [/b][/quote] Necroposting is when you post in a thread that's over 30 days old. It annoys a lot of people. Sorry if I sounded harsh. I appologize.
Necroposting is when you post in a thread that's over 30 days old. It annoys a lot of people. Sorry if I sounded harsh. I appologize. [/b][/quote] dont worry, i apologize. I didnt know what that was. my english's not that good. forgive me
You don't have to appologize. I understand. I don't think it's that big of a big deal. I'm just in a really bad mood today. So I'm forgiven?
You don't have to appologize. I understand. I don't think it's that big of a big deal. I'm just in a really bad mood today. So I'm forgiven? [/b][/quote] buddy, you damn are!!!
The more poems I read of yours the more I'm convinced that you are among the tops here,you have such a great talent to say what you want to and more importantly write those in the way what others like too,so in a nut shell you are just amazing,never ever stop your mind's bleed,ur mind's vommit let it come out and you will see what miracles it will do for you.
among the top. WOW thats a great compliment i came here to share a few things that i rote, i never thought i'd here that