End of the Earth

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    D_A_V_I_D

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    I look around and wonder,
    If the whole world has gone mad,
    So many people dying,
    From a plague everyone has had,
    This plague doesn’t attack the body,
    It kills the mind and soul,
    The plague is the hatred,
    That burns in us like coal.

    We kill, we steal,
    We rob, we hate,
    Walking blindly,
    To our fate,
    The path we chose,
    was the easy one,
    But at the end of the road,
    Evil has won.

    I walk through this broken world,
    Watching it all self-destruct,
    What ever turned us all into,
    A race whose fate is f###ed,
    Now I realise the truth of it all,
    That the human race is finished,
    I thought there was still good left,
    But now all my hope is diminished.

    We kill, we steal,
    We rob, we hate,
    Walking blindly,
    To our fate,
    The path we chose,
    was the easy one,
    But at the end of the road,
    Evil has won.

    In the dying days of the Earth,
    Everyone sees the light,
    But now it is too late for us all,
    Our fate we cannot fight,
    For what is happening now,
    Was brought on by our hate,
    Our death is our cross to bear,
    And we must all bear its weight.

    We kill, we steal,
    We rob, we hate,
    Walking blindly,
    To our fate,
    The path we chose,
    was the easy one,
    But at the end of the road,
    Evil has won.

    We kill, we steal,
    We rob, we hate,
    Walking blindly,
    To our fate,
    The path we chose,
    was the easy one,
    But at the end of the road,
    Evil has won.
     
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    arT saveS

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    That's pretty damn good, keep writing, I'd like to read more.
     
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    Luke

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    Brilliant! Its very basic but its a fucking great piece of work,very well done!
     
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    sickcycle

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    Dude, thats like a more dirty, modern rock version of my poem "The Undying Oath", almost to the core, just words and style are completely diferent. Safe to say i love the subject matter, good work man, would to see you keep this up and bring us more.
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    thanks this is probly only the 4th poem i've ever wrote, thats why it is still fairly basic. thanks for ur positive comments.

    and whats with " Dude, thats like a more dirty, modern rock version of my poem "The Undying Oath", almost to the core, just words and style are completely diferent" sickcycle. lol.

    anyway i've made a small edit to the chorus part, tell me which one u like better, i think the new one flows a bit better
     
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    sickcycle

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    I mean it has the basic plot outline message of my poem, just the words you use are more modern day speak, more like that of a rock song than a poem.
     
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    CloserToCrawling

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    That is a really amazing piece of literature. Very emotional and haunting. Good Job! :thumbsup: :D
     
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    ahamLP

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    Amazing,a very well written poem and has deep meaninng to it,its thought provoking too,great piece of work,well the thoughts in ur poem is something that I feel too,but something more strong and something a bit weird and scary the fact that I hate humans as a species and I would go to the extent of saying free the world of humans they lost credibility to live here. and I have written a poem on this topic too titled doom which I had posted sometime ago.if u would like to check it out click the link below

    http://www.lpassociation.com/forums/index....t=15507&hl=doom
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Nice job.
     
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    Il inno di morte

    Il inno di morte A noi si schiude il ciel...

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    :lol: well, in my opinion, it's a very deep & fucking awesome poem! by the way, whats the name of it? :) congrats! its avery good one! keep writing! :D
     
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    Il inno di morte

    Il inno di morte A noi si schiude il ciel...

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    lol sorry, the name was there. I apologize lol :D cool shit again, man!
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    I mean it has the basic plot outline message of my poem, just the words you use are more modern day speak, more like that of a rock song than a poem.[/b][/quote]
    i know what u mean but it still sounds funny. anway i really appriciate your positive comments. didnt expect such a big response.

    AhamLP. That was a nice poem really good.

    anyway sickcyle u read it b4 i changed the chorus part do u think the new one was beta it use to b

    We kill, we steal,
    We rob, we hate,
    For we all walk through,
    The easy gate,
    The road to destruction,
    Is the easy path,
    why's it always evil,
    that gets the last laugh

    also the new version of the chorus was helped editied by my friend Jean-Christophe.
     
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    sickcycle

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    yeah the new one is better
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

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    kool thanks, i thought so too.

    a bit off topic but what is with th buffalo thing around here.

    and what do u think of my sig pic.

    Thanks again everyoe for ur positive comments.
     
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    Il inno di morte

    Il inno di morte A noi si schiude il ciel...

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    yeah, me too. by the way, your sig pic rules! :D
     

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