Look into my eyes and you'll see a frozen fear. My dreams are scattered all over blindness, but why should I hope if they keep on melting? You may search for my spirit, but you'll only find a harmless gift. Do I have to initial my heart so they can recognize me? The mild nest of an everlasting struggle has created a gap in my already dirty path. All I can say is I'd like to bury this lack of imagination, cuz I'm fading from everybody's flooded course. I don't want to unplug the sun just to let them know that I'm still alive, that I once existed... They kept destroying the faith i once forbid. You are the only one who can take this dreadful cobwebs out of my mind. May I have your gentle touch now? Or should I please the ones who enjoy by turning stars into slaves? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Well, I'd like to hear what u think about it
really good. only being new to this poem writting thing im stuck on rhyming poems. But u have managed to pull of a great poem. i'm not sure what this poem is spose to be about but to me it feels as if someone just died unexpectedly. like got shot. like frozen fear. shows he's frozen/dead. and the thing about ppl forgetting him. but thats my interpritation
great,one of the better poems that I've read,very deep and meaningful and I guess the poem is about getting lost or forgotten by poeple u had cared about(I may be wrong) but overall the poem is great,hope 2 see more of ur stuff.keep it up.
Aham, buddy u r absolutely correct! This poem (if u may call that a poem) isnt very funny. I wrote it when I was in a very difficult situation i thought i could not bear. I seemed to be left behind by all the people I cared about, and that's not nice, specially when you think no one cares about you. Well, I guess u'll c more of my stuff around. Thanks for posting guys! c ya!!!