"Stereotype" I've come so close to the edge And I'm not sure I can come back again The cuts and the scars from the past bleedings Remind me of who I am again I feel the pressure building up inside my mind I tell myself that this one will be the last time I feel the glass pierce my veins I need the pain to make me whole again I can feel the pressure building up again Down the road and not across the street I need everyone to stay away from me All I need is a little shove to make me forget All about love and my life such as it is And I don't need you here to spew your shit And tell me that life is about living If if it were worth living I'd be a little more forgiving But I know that you're lying and time buying You're trying to keep me on this world just a little longer And if I could I'd stay but I'm not that strong anymore see? I can feel the pressure building up again Just get the fuck away! Just stay the fuck away! Get the fuck away! Cuttings and bleedings I can't live without them! Your teaching and preaching I could do without them! If you could see what I'm seeing My life is in misery If you could feel what I'm feeling You would become part of me My life is a journal filled with cryptic entries My words are a mirror to the blackness inside of me And I'm not going to stay here one moment more Just one little slice and no reason to exist anymore...
That's a good poem, or set of lyrics, whatever you prefer it to be. But, the only part I didn't like about it was the "Get the fuck away" part. Sort of gets too angry there. Otherwise, I like it. Good job, and keep writing.
Haha, I didn't even really intend this to be anything but at a stab at all the goth poems I've ever read. I'm glad you like it The "get the fuck away" part is pretty angry and angsty, but I suppose that's the narrator getting ready to go over the deep end.
Nice work of emotions there in your poem or whatever you want to call it. It is deep and seems to be thought about. Nice work.
Like Ive said before . Your stuff is amazing . I just hope you are already a professional writer or whatever . Are you ??
My writing? Amazing? You mean stuff by me? Heh, you must have me confused with someone else And nope, I'm not a pro writer, although I do like to read a lot, and I suppose that helps with writing too. Anywho, I thank you for your kind words, but I'm nowhere near amazing.
We could debate that . You are incredibly good . And yaah i read a lot too . Thats why i can say that you are really good .
It's an awesome, awesome poem/song. But it has no point, no offense. What is it a stereotype of? Or is there a hidden/personal point to the poem.
I meant this as nothing more than a quick stab at all of the goth poems I've ever read, as I said in my reply to Wkng Dead.
Cool,amazing,I just love this,but I have to say that the 1st stanza is a bit LPish kind of,but that doesnt make it any less,great piece of stuff,keep it up.