My Sustenance

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    lplava

    lplava Well-Known Member

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    this is my first ever post, so I'd appreciate criticism....please.

    My Sustenance

    A ray of sunshine that reaches the
    Cold dark corners of my wasted soul
    A sliver of hope that touches me
    When I feel I can hope no more
    Warm sunlight that melts the ice
    Surrounding the vulnerability that is my core
    A cool salve that heals my burns
    And soothes my cuts and sores.

    Strong arms that protect me
    And keep me safe at night
    Strong arms that hold me
    When I cry out in fright
    When blackness surrounds me
    And emptiness prevails
    There is one who I can turn to
    When all else fails.

    Who shall fight my battle with me
    Fight so I may be free
    Fight so I am trapped no more
    Fight so I may with him, soar
    Fight so I am no longer confined
    Fight so I regain what is truly mine
    Fight for the light that eludes me so
    Fight when I can fight no more.
     
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    Arhaz

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    good like i said over the phone...

    i like it...a lot! ^_^
     
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    Burningsoul

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    good lyrics, keep it up :D
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

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    Not bad for your first post.
     
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    Very good, well crafted indeed, keep it up!
     
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    RiffRockerX

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    Strong writing. It seems that you have put alot into this. Very nice indeed
     
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    lplava

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    Thanks a lot, everyone...
     

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