My lyrics

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    a life in ashes

    a life in ashes mercury summer

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    These lyrics are for my band, I would really appreciate some feedback, even if it's negative.

    Back to the Start

    What if I woke up today,
    What if I reformed today,
    And realised all the tricks and lies,
    Painted by your hand.

    Would you scream,
    Would you dream,
    Of the way it used to be,
    Keepin' me within the dark,
    Lets take it right back to the start

    So what if I went and lied,
    So what if I never tried,
    It makes no difference,
    When your on your own

    Would you scream,
    Would you dream,
    Of the way it used to be,
    Keepin' me within the dark,
    Lets take it right back to the start

    Would you scream,
    Would you dream,
    Of the way it used to be,
    Keepin' me within the dark,
    Lets take it right back to the start

    Back to the start,
    Back to the start,
    That's where i'll be,
    That's where i'll be, (Repeat x4)

    Far From Me

    So here I go, my numbness wins,
    I've gone and lost it on these hopeless whims,
    Because somethings failed, and now I need to scream,
    Realise the truth I need is laughing right at me

    And I know I've lost it all,
    So far from home,
    So far from me,
    So far from me

    Still on we go, face to face again,
    I'm cold and i'm broken,
    Scorned by all other men,
    Why won't you hear my story,
    Why won't you hear my truth,
    Is this what you wanted,
    My death upon this roof

    And I know I've lost it all,
    So far from home,
    So far from me,
    So far from me

    Why won't you hear my story,
    Why won't you hear my truth,
    Is this what you wanted,
    my death upon this roof

    And I know I've lost it all,
    So far from home,
    So far from me,
    So far from me

    It's all so far from me and now I am so cold,

    So cold(Repeat x3)

    You're Everything

    You're everything I wanted,
    You're everything I need,
    One glance of your beauty,
    One silent word of speech,
    Soon you'll have me falling,
    In a place never found before

    You're the love I wanted,
    I feel so fortunate,
    That now my dreams stop haunting,
    I feel so fortunate,

    So fortunate (repeat x3)
    You're my love,
    And at last I feel so fortunate.

    The Only Rest is Sleep

    Hatred Consumes,
    Every part of me,
    It's what you need to live,
    The you love died,

    Don't hold on anymore,
    This falsehoods all you've said before,
    When the only way to turn,
    Is back unto your sleep

    What a wasted life,
    Spent on chasing you,
    Forever driven back,
    And forced to bleed and scream,

    Don't hold on anymore,
    This falsehoods all you've said before,
    When the only way to turn,
    Is back unto your sleep

    I need to sleep (repeat x10)

    You know I need this peace...

    Clouding Out Your Life

    A friendship you thought would never end,
    A love meant for eternity,
    Those pills from blackness start to consume,
    Ruining you and me,

    If only you could see what you've done,
    See what you've brought between us,
    If I hadn't said it would you still be here,
    Not clouding out your life,
    These pills they've done to much...

    A lifetime spent in one short second,
    Your love like raindrops on my face,
    It's all dried away,
    By the blackness of these things,

    If only you could see what you've done,
    See what you've brought between us,
    If I hadn't said it would you still be here,
    Not clouding out your life,
    These pills they've done to much...

    I've said my piece, and now it's up to you,
    It's those pills or me and you,

    Those pills or me and you (repeat x3)

    If only you could see what you've done,
    See what you've brought between us,
    If I hadn't said it would you still be here,
    Not clouding out your life,
    These pills they've done to much...

    Start it to End it

    You always seem to hurt me,
    What's with this game you play,
    Making people want to run,
    Why did you start you and me?

    This thing you've ended,
    Was going under from the start,
    These wounds won't seem to heal,
    They never go away,
    Loving you, when all you wanted,
    Was the end of you and me,

    My heart again is aching,
    A word is all it takes,
    I think i'll give up now,
    And end my life today,

    This thing you've ended,
    Was going under from the start,
    These wounds won't seem to heal,
    They never go away,
    Loving you, when all you wanted,
    Was the end of you and me,

    The numbness takes me over,
    You've got what you wanted now,
    People ask why hold on,
    I answer that i'm still in disbelief,

    Disbelief at you and your lies,
    And the end of my life (repeat x4)

    Like I said please give feedback...
     
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    Link04

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    All anyone can ask from a writer is that the words are meaningful to him/her. As long as you find meaning with them, others somewhere will be able to relate to them, and find meaning in them as well, but your own recognition should be your first goal.
     
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    Evil Angel

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    they are pretty kool=have you completed writing the music for these lyrics?
     
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    Danny

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    i like em :D
     
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    a life in ashes

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    me and my band are in the process of writing the music for them-
    we've got our half term break soon so hopefully we'll get them done during that.
     

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