Death in the Cave As the whirlpool drains away the reminiscences, Clears my mind of every moment I shared With the peacefulness of long dead dull senses, I’m thrown into the Cave again. I tried running out of it, Through its mouth, that still lies wide exposed To the faculty of defense around it, I’m afraid the World needs me no more. The Cave is alone on the heavy shore of cinder, And the Sun never dawns on this side, Leaving the birds to bewilder, Why darkness reigns during the hottest part of the day. I corner myself and hug my cold lap, Lock it near my aching heart, The silence sucks the last remains of lively sap, And I die never to live again. it seemed tough writing this...so..i'm sorry if it's too short and to the point kind, but i wrote what i felt, took 'bout 10 minutes.
I thought i already gave a comment in this topic, i could say? maybe it got deleted, but any way, here is my comment again.... very good, this is short but as you said, to the point, powerifull, and kick ass, congrats on a good piece of writing!