A song-like thing

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    Kate

    Kate beat me senseless LPA Super Member

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    Anything in parentheses is whispered, anythin italicized is screamed.

    What difference does it make
    The time we spent together
    When all your smiles were faked
    And everything you said to me...

    (one, two, three, four)

    Lies...

    Did you love me, did you care?
    I know I wasn't always there
    That choice took you away from me
    With you I lost what we could be
    My dreams at night, still filled with you
    Fuck dreams, I know they won't come true
    I'd say I hate you, but I can't
    Lost too much because of you

    I came back to you, tried to show
    That I still wanted to be with you
    I always told what you needed to know
    Too bad you never did the same...

    (one, two, three, four)

    Trust...

    Did you love me, did you care?
    I know I wasn't always there
    That choice took you away from me
    With you I lost what we could be
    My dreams at night, still filled with you
    Fuck dreams, I know they won't come true
    I'd say I hate you, but I can't
    Lost too much because of you

    She confessed it all to me
    You kept going with your acts
    Too late for that, since I could see
    That you'd already forgotten me

    (one, two, three, four)

    Don't mess with me now, you bastard

    Did you love me, did you care?
    I know I wasn't always there
    That choice took you away from me
    With you I lost what we could be
    My dreams at night, still filled with you
    Fuck dreams, I know they won't come true
    I'd say I lhate you, but I can't
    I've lost too much because of you

    Lost too much...
    Forgotten me...
    Lost too much...
    Don't mess with me now, you bastard
     
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    Darcy

    Darcy LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    Awesome, I really like the screaming and whispering thing. I can somewhat imagine what it would sound like in a song. For some reason, I real like the fuck dreams they wont come true line.

    Good work! :D
     
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    Jon[athan]

    Jon[athan] Sincerly, written from my brothers blood machine.

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    yeah i really liked the whispering/screaming thing. it helps me to "play" the song in my head. good work.
     
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    lp_sk8ergurl

    lp_sk8ergurl Well-Known Member

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    Whispering helps alot.
     

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