Final Explaination

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    LP_Freak_2735

    LP_Freak_2735 Well-Known Member

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    Final Explaination

    I'm slipping
    I can't stop pacing
    Pacing, pacing, forever
    Nervous, anxious, blessed
    Insanity rules my mind
    Leaving this world behind
    Back and forth over and over again
    Thinking constantly
    Can't stop
    Shaking, silently screaming
    Bleeding crimson cries
    For the end of life
     
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    LP_Freak_2735

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    Thanks for the billions of comments... :wth: :argh:
     
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    i liked it, 6.9/10 [best score i have ever given was a 9.6, think of my scoring system as that of IMDB]. A wee bit short, but gets the job done in record time for those people with short attintion spans. Kinda creepy, could be cooler if you adden in things the person was hearing, seeing, feeling, and so on; that really emerses the reader into the story. But its still very good for being so short, like i said, good job.
     

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