"Rising" Towering waters over me, I'm panicking Feeling the waves around me put on the strain Coming at me from every side And with each new wave Another twist of the knife Pressure is the word to describe This feeling I'm under, this black tide I have the feeling that I'm about to drown The tidal waves keep pulling me down Running to reach higher ground But everything's washed away No rock for me to stand upon No solid ground to keep me safe Trying to avoid the water By taking up the upper road And although I escape the waves My progress is slow There has to be a faster way I feel the panic rising once again Taking me by the arm and pulling me in The tide will not let me escape, dragging me down It deluges me, covering me and I can't make a sound Running to reach higher ground But everything's washed away No rock for me to stand upon No solid ground to keep me safe I thought that I could swim I thought that I could see Straight through this ocean of my own misery Thought that I had nothing to fear But now that I'm submerged it's all so clear Struggling underwater, gasping for air Feeling myself drowning once again Under the ocean, don't recognize The fear that has me under the tide Feeling so calm now Feel that I can breathe All I have left now are distant memories The only thing left to do is for me to wait And hope that the waters will drain once again Now the waters are beginning to recede Can see through the waters that covered me I feel my heartbeat beginning to slow The panic is ebbing and it won't be long till it goes I can see dry land beginning to appear Just a little more time and I can let go of my fear The pressure that fed this ocean of pain Has left me drenched with nothing to gain The only thing I can be glad for Is that the strain is gone But how long will it be gone for? Can I do it again alone? Finally got to higher ground For now I'm feeling safe I just hope that this rock will be here The next time the waters rise again
All I can say is that that was F'ing excellent!,Its very powerful and I like the use of metaphors,very very well done! More of that stuff and I'll have to eliminate you because of the competition
Very nice work. Would you do be the BIGGESTfavor in the world and read my story, "The Second Tuesday of Last Week" and like criticize it or something? I'd like to see what you think of it.