Your Promises

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by ChazyChaz_gurl13, Jan 6, 2005.

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    ChazyChaz_gurl13

    ChazyChaz_gurl13 Banned

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    YOUR PROMISES

    Do you remember.
    The very first day we met.
    You told me you loved me.
    That I wuz the one for you.
    You promised to never
    forget where you came from.
    You said that whatever
    happens we'll always be together.

    I just wanna know.
    What happened to your promises.
    Wherever I go
    I think about you
    and what you said to me.

    Now I am here
    Wondering where I went wrong.
    I still can't believe
    that I was such a fool.
    I really believed you
    and all that crap that you told me.
    And now I must sit here
    thinking of you.

    I just wanna know
    What happened to your promises
    Wherever I go
    I think about you
    and what you said to me

    ..me...and what you said to me....me.... and what you... oh

    I just wanna know
    What happened to your promises
    Wherever I go
    I think about you
    and what you said to me

    I just wanna know
    What happened to your promises
    Wherever I go
    I think about you
    and what you said to me

    what you said to me.


    PLEEZ COMMENT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
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    sickcycle

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    Well it is decent, pretty good flow, although it's to direct for my liking, try to be less obvious, use metephores and better words than "Crap".... just realized the dude is banned :unsure:
     

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