Hold it inside All this bullshit The fucking lies Hold it inside Don't let them knøw Don't let it shøw Hold it inside It's not like they care They won't be there I'll Hold it inside Please let me die
All I can say the idea has been done to death, but that’s fine if you can put a new spin on it. Unfortunately here isn’t the case, I would also recommend better word usage; find some better alternatives to words like fuck, and bullshit. Make it colorful. It's not my intintion to be harsh, just trying to give pointers, same goes for me, I love pointers and constructive critisism for my work.