Red Tuesday As she walks down the aisle She pieces together her courage in time to fake a smile She wonders how long until this ring falls off and all hope fades away Then later wiping the dust off the family album - She puts her picture inside I never knew something with a heart so dark could look so good in a gown so white Linked together hand in hand If we depart I will drown, dead and bland Queen of my heart I never knew you’d change so much in me Blasphemy – I no longer know what to believe Don’t look back Leaving nothing behind Now it’s just you and me under the midnight sky Running – Who knows what we’ll find Paint myself grey with your disdain Cut my heart open to numb the pain Don't bullshit me, since you don't know your place in this game Lucky you I just don't know where to start At first so bitter but now you've had a change of heart But first you just didn't notice- Second time, your at my feet with open arms and eyes Third time lucky - But I fucked up - So much for my self esteem Nothing special - Just sentimental - And it's all mine We may not last forever, but this'll never be the last time Remember the days side by side- Those times were just a flash, but they felt so right This has lost all meaning - We've become a joke Another punch line made up of broken dreams This hurts but I ain't givin' into you I'm weak, but I won't do what you want me to Nothing special - Just sentimental - And it's all mine We may not last forever, but this'll never be the last time Remember the days side by side- Those times were just a flash, but they felt so right Together as one - Untouchable But my heart of glass has never been so fragile They tell us that we'll never last Their words begin to burden me I can't stand the thought of us two (only having nothing but the past) And our memories Nothing special - Just sentimental - And it's all mine We may not last forever, but this'll never be the last time Remember the days side by side- Those times were just a flash, but they felt so right Lucky you The one (My last love song) Did you ever wonder why I slept so long I wanted to dream of you for eternaty Then you woke me... My eyes got lost in your beauty Stuttering for things to say to you But actions are louder than words this is my last love song So I gotta make this clear I loved you and you never knew I always told you I needed something All I wanted was you I'm gonna hold you close Once I grasp, I'm never gonna let go I'm never gonna let you fall I never wanna lose it all 'Cause you're the one... The one who can sing me to sleep The one who makes my heart beat The one with lips so sweet The one I hope to keep forever Waiting on tomorrow The blackened sky It will cover our eyes tonight It's going to leave us blind Or hopes and dreams our only sacrifice I wanna know when will this end? I'm tired of all this bullshit and the pretending I wanna know if I can depend on you Or do I stand alone while my heart is breaking Did you ever wonder what was the cause of this tragedy So stubborn you couldn't see it's killing me Its time the tables turned, so then you're left with nothing Lets see if you still ignore me now that you're on broken knee's I wanna know when will this end? I'm tired of all this bullshit and the pretending I wanna know if I can depend on you Or do I stand alone while my heart is breaking Lies redefine us all Shows us how to live, show us how to fall Take me out of the limelight I don't wanna see the stars no more You got nothing against me Since you can't defeat me But still you turn around face down and try to break me I'm...Untouchable I wanna know when will this end? I'm tired of all this bullshit and the pretending I wanna know if I can depend on you Or do I stand alone while my heart is breaking
All 4 songs are well written. Great job! I really like "The One (My Last Love Song)" the best. I can relate to it. Can't wait to read more.
I just wrote another, hope you like it My words (did you ever) Did you ever wonder why I hated you? Did you ever wonder why you were born to lose? Did you ever ask why, when you’re out done by authority? Did you ever add it up, when you’re out numbered by the majority? So sweat, so dead, so silent I never thought my words would be so violent and final Did you ever remember how you got here? Did you ever find out why you feared me, so? Did you ever try to get away when I let my guard down? Did you ever flinch when the spotlight found you? So sweat, so dead, so silent I never thought my words would be so violent and final Did you ever get scared when the cold crept up your spine? Did you ever know what was on your mind? Did you ever cure your depression? Did you ever seize your obsession?
Thanx again Burningsoul. Here another one that I've just finished. It could need a little touching up and editing but anywayz, here it is: Rocket queen Spend another night by my side – In my mind Together forever – Or at least ‘till sunrise Rocket queen set it off Because if you love it you gotta let go We're gonna start a riot We just can't keep it quiet Waking up the nabourghood Rocket queen set it off Because if you love it you gotta let go Rocket queen set it off Because if you love it you gotta let go Crash course for a place by my side It’s that planet that you’ll never know
All the songs are good and would be something that I would listen to if performed well, but it sounds too much like everything else on the radio. Use words and create lyrics that we haven't heard yet. plus, it's aisle, not isle. isle is an island.
i think there is so many songs and writings now that to write something that hasnt been writen about before is a challenge for a complete genius. plus we all write about things we probably relate to and if that is what he is relating to right now, that's ok. and yes, he could word spice it here and there, but you have to be truthful what is inside without pampering it too much. i think your doing great, adam. i did like the last love poem the best too.
Thanx for the feedback, I shall work on my lyrics. Oh and SolXfyR thanx for pointing out the correct spelling of 'aisle' to me