some friends and i are starting a band, kinda going along slow, but i wrote the lyrics to our first song which has yet to develop written music. at least the words are down. we're still uncertain about a band name, i think right now we're "black monday" or "The Anomalies." p.s. it's not supposed to always rhyme. here you go: Void 1: Locked in chains, they grip me to my seat, On board to repeated perils of your doing. You still don’t see the tears or scabs, The bruises are no use, the greed provokes; you’re glad. A victim of your selfishness, Show me off to your friends again. Words departing my mouth raise your defenses, And I’m bemused as to why our communication’s ruined. Hook: How do I elaborate, I’ve been in pain since the day. I gotta find a way to emancipate. This train of life is making me sick. This is my stop, I’m getting out of this. Feelings gone astray, I can’t stay, The feeling’s expired, you put too much delay. The first thing on your list was you glad, Subconsciously killing me with a knife in my back. 2: When you’re asking me to buy you your wants, You’re pushing my open arms away. When the world stormed on you and became untrue, I climbed Mt. Everest to return to you. But a shelter for your lies was I, If I seceded from you now, only your closet would realize. Chalk outlines already marked out, On my bed where I die, dipping my face down. Nights are nightmares, and life the same, How did you become so vain? I used to paint fantasies in my head, But you burned my easel down to ashes. Trying hard not to look at you, Disappointed you turned on your own virtues. Tired of games where only I will lose, Not just the theft of my heart but all the abuse. The more that I try to open up my book, You keep ripping pages out and eating them in front of my face!!! Hook: How do I elaborate, I’ve been in pain since the day. I gotta find a way to emancipate. This train of life is making me sick. This is my stop, I’m getting out of this. Feelings gone astray, I can’t stay, The feeling’s expired, you put too much delay. The first thing on your list was you glad, Subconsciously killing me with a knife in my back. Break 1: Rather than help me in my despair, You bend the knife gored deep in my back. Apology exists not in your terminology, Only “me,” “myself,” and “I!!!" <guitar break> Break 2: Why? I can’t stand your bitter eyes. Sigh. Kiss me only when I buy. Mine. The heart you promised to love but lied. Cry. I count how long it’s been my demise. Hook: How do I elaborate, I’ve been in pain since the day. I gotta find a way to emancipate. This train of life is making me sick. This is my stop, I’m getting out of this. Feelings gone astray, I can’t stay, The feeling’s expired, you put too much delay. The first thing on your list was you glad, Subconsciously killing me with a knife in my back. Final: I can’t sustain normality, As you persist my woe. Little did you know, I did it all so you would be happy. Rather than help me in my despair, You bend the knife gored deep in my back. Apology exists not in your terminology, Only “me,” “myself,” and “I.” [c] 321xero
I cant get a good rhythem of the lyrics, they dont flow very well.(I know its probably not a rap song, but rock lyrics need to flow as well). Also, unless your singing pretty fast thats going to be like, a 5-6 minute song. Thats pretty long.
I agree quite long Im debating whether I should start posting up my stuff too...well...if derek thinks it's good enuff i will B)