About someone close to me

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    Debus

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    Another one of my crappy poems. I really need some ratings on this one please guys. I'm trying to get some lyrics down to use in my band and i got a sudden burst of inspiration the other night and these are the best i came up with. No name either so if anyone could come up with a name that would be VERY helpful :)

    I pushed you to your limit and here is my apology
    I should have noticed what I was doing sooner
    It was me that destroyed us
    I drove myself insane over blaming you
    When it was really me who needed to be blamed
    I held on to you so tight every day
    Hoping that you would come back
    It hurt so see you happy all that time
    While I wallowed in my misery
    Over the biggest loss of my life

    I'm like a shattered piece of glass
    The pieces are hard to find
    I'm scattered everywhere
    Never to be found again

    Picking up the pieces of my life after you tore me apart has not been easy
    You threw me over to one side without a care for me at all
    I know I was hard to deal with but why couldn't you cope?
    I find myself hard to deal with day in day out
    I have thought of ending this petty existence of mine many a time
    But stop myself for my own sake and yours
    You may have intended to hurt me like you did
    You may have not but either way it happened
    I'm glad to see you healing me but the wounds are still there
    Visible or not, the scars still run deep inside my body

    I’m like a shattered piece of glass
    The pieces are hard to find
    I’m scattered everywhere
    Never to be found again

    Shattered into a million pieces and still trying to find them
    I hope you will accept this apology for my stupid actions
    And we can move on with our lives...


    Bad and good feedback are very welcome
     
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    I like it :)




    Shattered Apology or something like that for the title, maybe? :)
     
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    Debus

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    Thanks Dave :)

    Yeah that's a pretty good name actualy ^_^ Any other ideas people?
     
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    Thats sick-Well done :thumbsup:
     
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    Thankies hellflame Prophecy ^_^
     
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    Wow, I really like that part!

    So many people can relate to that verse.

    Awesome poem. Keep writing ^_^
     
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    Wow thanks :blush: ^_^
     

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