My first "official" song. I actually put a lot of my emotions into this... tell me what you think. Something More Than Nothing (prechorus) Screaming silently the pain I feel inside grows I'm holding me, keeping myself from success Screaming silently the pain I feel inside shows I'm binding me, keeping myself in the darkness (verse1) Living like this really isn't worth it I cannot go on feeling this way It's not worth falling into this pit I feel like this every single day I need someone to help me go Now I'm seeing things differently I just want you to know That I cannot move very quickly (prechorus) Screaming silently the pain I feel inside grows I'm holding me, keeping myself from success Screaming silently the pain I feel inside shows I'm binding me, keeping myself in the darkness (chorus) I remember when I first gazed into your eyes I thought nothing of it The first time I ever talked to you I thought nothing of it Please don't disregard me and call these lies I think something of it But I just can't say what I need to I think something of it I just can't go through with anything Something more than nothing (verse2) I hate this pain I have to suffer with Sometimes I wonder if I can last I wonder if I can give it up and quit Then I sit back and think about the past Feeling the same for others around me I don't know if I should tell them Hurting you's not my destiny I don't want it to be my end (prechorus) Screaming silently the pain I feel inside grows I'm holding me, keeping myself from success Screaming silently the pain I feel inside shows I'm binding me, keeping myself in the darkness (chorus) I remember when I first gazed into your eyes I thought nothing of it The first time I ever talked to you I thought nothing of it Please don't disregard me and call these lies I think something of it But I just can't say what I need to I think something of it I just can't go through with anything Something more than nothing (bridge) One way I can feel safe is with you by my side I need someone like you to be my one guide Things are changing all around me today Only I can be the one who justifies my way You may think I feel nothing for you But deep inside I truly adore you Yet I feel as though I have no real purpose It's hurting me from right beneath the surface (outro) Something more than nothing You can help me see The things right in front of me Something more than nothing You can help me trust The things I cannot discuss Something more than nothing I need to tell you now The only problem is... how?
wow, akuma....that's really good. i can really understand this song. darnit i have lp stuck inside my head so its hard to find out the pace in this song. <_<
You caught that, eh? Damn.. lol. Actually, though, I wasn't even thinking of that when I wrote it... I realized it when I listened to "Welcome," I was like, "I heard this before somewhere.." lol.. And thanks.. yes, Derek helped me tap into my emotions and, damn, the fell out of me into that song.
You caught that, eh? Damn.. lol. Actually, though, I wasn't even thinking of that when I wrote it... I realized it when I listened to "Welcome," I was like, "I heard this before somewhere.." lol.. And thanks.. yes, Derek helped me tap into my emotions and, damn, the fell out of me into that song. [/b][/quote] Taproot also have an EP with the title of 'Something More Than Nothing..."
Good lyrics. The prechorus doesn't flow that well, at least by just reading it. Try rewriting the song again, but with the same ideas and most of the words. Just try rearranging the song around and find a better flow. That's just my advice.
The prechorus is whispered really silently behind soft guitar riffs and then there's a huge riff and the chorus starts.