New song (No name)

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    Debus

    Debus Morbid Fascination LPA Addict

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    Well you probably all know i am not the best writer on these forums but itry every now andthen when i have things to write about. This happens to be one of those times. So, please read and give honest opinions. It's not very good but hey.

    These past months have been sheer bliss
    You and me in happier times
    But now i don't know what's going on
    With us and how we feel

    We used to be such good friends
    But now you have abandoned me
    Left me out in the cold
    To be with everyone else

    Please tell me what happened
    What made you change your mind
    About everything we had
    Why throw it all away now?

    I changed my world to be with you
    I sometimes wonder what it was for
    Was it to feel loved?
    Or was it to keep me sane

    Why did i even bother
    If you were going to do this to me
    I thought you might have changed with me
    But i know you'll always be the same

    What have i done this time?
    I don't want to hurt again
    So please, please tell me
    Why are you breaking me

    You cut up my heart once before
    Now you're doing it again
    The pain is too much to endure
    I hope you're happy...
     
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    esaul17

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    Pretty good, at first I thought it was a sappy love song (the likes of which I hate) but it quickly picked up the pessamistic vibe that I've come to love.

    Also sorry if what you said in the song has really happened to you (which it seems to have). I'm not trying to be insensitive.
     
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    Debus

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    Thanks Esaul17. Don't worry about feeling insensitive, you weren't. Anyways, thanks for the comment
     
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    Canadian Joe

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    EXACTLY how I feel about Lynn. You couldn't have summed it up better...

    Nice work! (w00t)
     
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    Trish

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    So so sad.
    But beautiful at the same time.
     
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    Debus

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    Thanks people :)
     
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    that is so... beautifully mornful.... and i am sorry if that did happen to you know one is worth so much pain... :(
     
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    Leones

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    It's pretty good Debs! Beautiful. ^_^
     
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    Debus

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    Wow, this is the best feedback i have ever got for my work. Thanks so much guys :D
     

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