I don't want to stay

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    Branden

    Branden hey! LPA Super Member

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    This is my first writing anything, I'd like some comments and I know that alot needs work. I'm not really sure what it is.. Poem, Lyrics, whatever. Thanks. P.S. I know it's very 'rhymey'. Does that effect it?
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    I Don't Want to Stay

    \ I break a part of my heart every day
    \ To try and find a way
    \ To say that I dont want to be here,
    \ I don't want to stay

    \ With all of this tension
    \ And all this apprehension
    \ I'm just waiting to die,
    \ Can't you see in my eyes?
    \ Can you see in my soul?
    \ I'm in this hole
    \ Without parole.
    \ I don't want to stay, with all of this pain,
    \ No, I don't want to stay.

    \ I need to go, go away
    \ The skies here are grey
    \ I'll make my way from here,
    \ because I cannot stay,
    \ No, I just simply cannot stay.
    \ I don't want to stay!
     
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    ass_kicker

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    its beautiful :mellow: i love it.
     

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