Crack

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    Jamie

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    Serve me, Now I've removed myself from hell
    Walk me, To the hollow gates of the past
    A tormented soul I stand alone
    A stained whisper, upon broken ground
    I gaze inside my troubled mind
    And serve my masters every command

    I can't stand to see myself this way
    Alone I sense my well being
    I sense my troubles all beginning to crack

    At the end of the path, your voice breaks the silence
    Another whip of your chains
    Shalt send me crashing down
    The shadows on the concrete statues
    Line the exit from you heart
    A requiem in your honour will stand
    And serve your masters every command

    I can't stand to see myself this way
    Alone I sense my well being
    I sense my troubles all beginning to crack

    What more can I offer you now?
    Another drop from my spiked tongue
    What more can I offer you now?
    Another taste of my spoilt remains

    I can't stand to see myself this way
    Alone I sense my well being
    I sense my troubles all beginning to crack
     
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    Trish

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    Woah :mellow:
     
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    Jamie

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    Is that a good whoa? or a bad one?
     
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    wow!!! that's really good!
     
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    Jamie

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    Thanks :)
     
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    Trish

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    A bad woah?
    Never heard of one!
     
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    Jamie

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    so a good one then..

    nice ;)
     
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    Arhaz

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    neat work dude! you are good...and i'm definetly going get my training from you! it's has a science fiction background, though...does it? cause an eerie atmosphere is what i imagine when i read your work... :)
     
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    Jamie

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    More of a horror thing..but yeah I get where your coming from.
     
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    Arhaz

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    nice...so when do you start giving me classes? :D
     
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    Jamie

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    Erm....Whenever I learn to write good :)
     
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    Arhaz

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    You are good!!! :D
     
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    very, very nice work :thumbsup:
     
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    whoa. (w00t) good job!
     

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