Haunted

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    [Fool]

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    Don't know where to begin,
    Watching everything spin,
    my world, my life, falling down around me,
    nothing i can do,
    nothing but sit here and watch.

    This is my life, my world, my dream....

    I'm not scared of dieing,
    i just dont want to,
    all my life i had one thing,
    One thing i had to do.

    One day, some how,
    you'll pay for the pain you caused me,
    ill come back to haunt you,
    come back, you'll be sorry.

    Your time is coming,
    ill be there soon,
    revenge is sweet,
    you'll soon feel the heat,
    the heat of HEll!
     
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    tkd_rap

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    i do believe that is a rip-off of LP, so i would change that line. Now the rest of the song is good, but needs work, the final lines i didnt care for, but overall i think the song isnt that bad, for a first time i say you have some talent, this is way better than some of my first writtings. But with time you will perfect it.
     
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    i do believe that is a rip-off of LP, so i would change that line. [/b][/quote]
    i dont beleive it is, not to my knowledge..... meh ill change it if i get time
     
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