Acid burns

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    Fenix Pharell

    Fenix Pharell Active Member

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    dark clouds cover the sky
    Darkness covers every soul that passes by
    Light rain starts falling
    Peope start running
    acidic drops touch evryone
    melting them as if they had touched the sun
    in teh middle of the melting skin
    In the place where no one should have been
    sits a kid watching the surrounding screams
    covered with the image of his dreams
    drops fall on him, but he's still dry
    However, he wishes he could close his eye
    But he can't. he's stuck to see
    people melt, with no way to flee

    Darkness falls then starts the rain
    But the rain can't erase the pain
    Acid, poison, blood, scars and burns
    All these happens when teh wheel turns

    Watching the blood in the pudddle
    the kid cannot even shudder
    He wants to run, he wants to hide
    He wants go go away, to be outside
    But he can't he's stuck, he's still
    has to hear every drop spill
    every sound it makes him scream
    Another thoguht, another dream
    he rain goes on to infinity
    untill the kid can finally be free

    Darkness falls then starts the rain
    But the rain can't erase the pain
    Acid, poison, blood, scars and burns
    All these happens when teh wheel turns

    The rain finnaly stopped
    No more sound of drops
    No more scream of pain
    no more clouds of rain
    no more life and no more death
    just the kid in the depth
    in the puddels of blood and skin
    Please, wake me up, mut be a dream!
    he can move now, but he stands
    watches around, screams for a chance
    but chances are dead, so-s everything else
    This is teh apocalipse, this was his death.
     
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    Glenn

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    Woah dude! Really good work! A few grammatical errors maybe u should edit. "in teh middle of the melting skin"
     
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    Leones

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    I'm seriously, this is really, very good! But what Glenn said, maybe you should edit the grammatical errors, it would become more flowing to read. If you know what I mean. :thumbsup: great work.
     
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    Fenix Pharell

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    i think u mean typing errors not gramatical:)
    gramatical=(example) we am happy
     
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    Fenix Pharell

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    but anyway:)....i'm really surprised u liked it..i posted this somewhere else adn gotr a pm from a stranger that sai'd i'm screwed up:|
     
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    Leones

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    :lol: :lol: yeah, whatever ^_^
     
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    Fenix Pharell

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    iih lok...I'm not a Opening anymore..I'm so proud
     
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    Leones

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    yes, you've done very well :lol:
     

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