Breakdown

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    Will

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    Breakdown

    You mother fucking bitch

    You came into my world as a no one
    Then you soon became my someone
    Someone that I could never have
    Now I kick myself all the fucking time
    You’re somebody else’s—not mine
    You’re someone I could never have

    I don’t care what you wanted
    I just wanted you
    Shut up, you little bitch
    I don’t care now
    I don’t care what you wanted
    I just wanted you
    Shut up, you little bitch
    I don’t care now

    It’s true, the way I feel was promised by your face
    The time has come for me to put you in your place
    It’s true, the way I feel was promised by your face
    Now I just need to find a way out of this place
    (Bitch)

    [song break]

    I always saw you as a castaway
    Now I’ve got nothing left to say
    Since you started fitting in here
    And now it seems you’re friends with everyone
    Except me—where did I go wrong?
    I have no reason to stay here

    I don’t care what you wanted
    I just wanted you
    Shut up, you little bitch
    I don’t care now
    I don’t care what you wanted
    I just wanted you
    Shut up, you little bitch
    I don’t care now

    It’s true, the way I feel was promised by your face
    The time has come for me to put you in your place
    It’s true, the way I feel was promised by your face
    Now I just need to find a way out of this place
    (Bitch)

    [song break]

    Can I stay in love forever?
    I wish I could but I’ll never be able to
    Could I say that we’re together?
    I wish I could but I’ll never be able to
    Can I stay in love forever?
    I wish I could but I’ll never be able to
    Could I say that we’re together?
    I wish I could but I’ll never be able to
    BREAKDOWN

    [song break]

    [solo]

    [song break]

    You came into my world as a no one
    Then you soon became my someone
    Someone I could never have
    And now it seems you’re friends with everyone
    Except me—where did I go wrong?
    I have no reason to stay here

    I don’t care what you wanted
    I just wanted you
    Shut up, you little bitch
    I don’t care now
    I don’t care what you wanted
    I just wanted you
    Shut up, you little bitch
    I don’t care now

    It’s true, the way I feel was promised by your face
    The time has come for me to put you in your place
    It’s true, the way I feel was promised by your face
    Now I just need to find a way out of this place
    (Bitch)

    It’s true, the way I feel was promised by your face
    The time has come for me to put you in your place
    It’s true, the way I feel was promised by your face
    Now I just need to find a way out of this place
    (Fuck you)

    [song break]

    It’s true, the way I feel was promised by your face
    The time has come for me to put you in your place
    It’s true, the way I feel was promised by your face
    Now I just need to find a way out of this place
    (Bitch)

    It’s true, the way I feel was promised by your face
    The time has come for me to put you in your place
    It’s true, the way I feel was promised by your face
    Now I just need to find a way out of this place
    (Fuck you)

    You’re in your place now, bitch

    -edit-
    Typos.
     
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    Anya

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    Very angsty, I like it.

    Except the line "It’s true, the way I feel was promised by your face." is a Linkin Park line as well if you forgot. Everytime I read that I think it's their song. :lol:

    But besides that, very very good. Nice emotion.
     
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    Casual D

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    It's quite possible he could have been influenced by With You *shrugs*. Artists do it all the time, Evanescence sampled a line from Metallica's "Fade To Black".

    Overall it's a different song for you Will and I really enjoy it. I was a bit shocked by the "You motherf*cking b*tch" opening line. I was like.."Damn, Will's pissed!"

    Nice job though, I wish I still had my creative energy so I could write as much as you.
     
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    Maëlle

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    Some may find it shocking but I find it amazing! While reading it I was ' Sh*t, Will's going to murder someone by the end of the day'

    Don't stop to write, Will, you have a lot of talent!
     
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    Glenn

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    That's really good! I like how u put where the song breaks cause then I can hear the song in my mind better. Some of the lyrics are a little immature but it is still very well written! :) :rawk:
     
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    Will

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    Thanks for the comments.
     

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