I duno if this is the right forum for this but oh well. I wrote this song around 3-5 hours ago and I would really appreciate it if you guys could read it and review it for me...thx. Death Is Just The End My mind is like a swinging pendulum Moving on through life without an aim Flashing thoughts and distant memories In life. In death. I have nothing left to gain. So break me down To a puddle on the floor A puddle of blood and mishap The pendulum isn’t swinging anymore. My heart is like a roaring river Flowing through the mist and fog Breaking bones and cracking skulls Hear my cry! Hear my plea! When I tell you there is no aim In life. In death. There’s nothing left to gain. So break me down To a puddle on the floor A puddle of tears and sorrows The river isn’t flowing anymore I fear there will be no tomorrow I can’t think straight now Isn't it funny how When life is meaningless to me To me and my broken heart I crumble and fall apart To a pile of ash upon the floor And now I know, I know There's nothing left to gain So when the fog and mist clears There’ll be nothing left for me here My mind is twisting through the black Till it fades away and will never come back So hear my cry, and hear my plea! There is nothing left here for me. Hear my cry! Hear my plea! When I tell you there is no aim In life and in death! There’s nothing left to gain! For me. Copyright. Darran Meader. 2003
I think those lyrics very much rock! If you ever record that song Id love to hear it, but the only suggestion I have is the title...to bleak. I suggest "Break Me Down" since u say that several times in the song But, VERY nice work B) .: Omi
those lyrics are great! i suggest you either record them or send them to a record company for cash. haha.
Thx....I actually formed a band yesterday, so it is a possibility that it will be recorded in the future. We just need a guitarist. Most of the titles for the songs I've writen aren't final yet...but thanks for the advice.