Part of me

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    Trish

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    Yes, well this is a quick piece I wrote while bored at school
    And I need a new title...

    I hear your screams in the distance
    In the darkest depths of my head
    Soaked in blood, I kneel before you
    Internal hungers, never fed

    I looked to the sky, from my arms I bled
    I felt so alive, wishing I was dead
    Holding my part of you inside myself
    This was a secret, one I'd never tell
     
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    Trish

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    Come on dudes!
    I need your help!

    It's for a school project!
     
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    Omar A

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    My Nightmare?


    BTW, Its a wicked poem
     
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    Caitlin

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    I like the poem, nice job.

    As far as choosing a title...perhaps

    Fallen
    Conscious
    Break Away
    Enclosure

    ..?
     
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    Casual D

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    "Holding A Part Of You"

    "Distance"

    "A Secret Never Told"

    "Between a Bloody Suicide"

    "Beneath Tommorrow's Midnight"

    *shrugs*
     
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    EvolutionaryFuse

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    "Holding A Part Of You"

    "Distance"

    "A Secret Never Told"

    "Between a Bloody Suicide"

    "Beneath Tommorrow's Midnight"

    *shrugs* [/b][/quote]
    this is realy cool......... name?



    Distance is pritty cool
     
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    Trish

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    Ok..well...I'm not sure.

    But thanks for your suggestions!! B)
     
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    saunderitos

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    yo dog,i gotta name how about,i bled for u.or summin like that,
     
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    Trish

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    Hey, I bled for you is a pretty awesome name, I think I'll use that one...!!
     
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    linktolinkinpark

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    there is also 'needing to bleed' or like, "I bled a part of you' B)
     
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    Cal

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    Closure.

    i dunno why it just seemed fitting. awesome stuff though
     
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    linkin_sylph

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    I think "Hunger." But I don't know, because when an "artist" writes a poem, they should also know the title of it..
     

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